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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
linegraph
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line graph
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 ( illustrates ) the past, current and projected
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population
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populations
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 of the two
countries
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 which are
China
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 and
India
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 between 1990 and 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that there is
and
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an
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 upward trend for
both
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countries
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. The dotted line
demonstrate
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 ( demonstrates ) the trend of
China
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while
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 the solid line
demonstrate
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 ( demonstrates ) the
population
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 of
India
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. In 1990, the
population
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 of
India
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 were ( was ) about 0.85
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billions
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billion
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(
billion
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 ) of
people
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whereas
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 (
people
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,
whereas
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 ) there was a huge
diffrent
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difference
 ( difference ) from
China
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 with more than 1.1
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billions
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billion
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 (
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billions
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billion
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of
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people
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. In the
next
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 years, the
population
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 of
both
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China
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 and
India
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 increased
steady
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 ( steadily ). In 2020, the inhabitants of
both
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the
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apply
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countries
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has
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have
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 ( have ) a small difference,
China
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 were 1.4
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billions
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billion
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 (
billion
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 ) and
India
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were
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was
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 ( was ) 1.3
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billions
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billion
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 (
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billions
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billion
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 )
of
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people
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. The two lines describe the
population
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 of
both
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 the
countries
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intersect
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intersecting
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 each other in 20330 which remained that the
population
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 will be the same
this
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 year. It is projected that
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China
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China's
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population
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 will start declining after 2030
while
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India
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 will continue to increase and will reach
to
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1.6 million in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, china, india, both, billions, billion, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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