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The reason that most people are in debt is the overuse as well as irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks ought to do a background check and only issue credit cards to individuals who have the ability to pay back their debts. What is your opinion?

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 is very popular and in trend nowadays. In the modern world, almost everyone has their own cards from various banks. People are overusing
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 and do not think twice before using it and not able to pay on time. Due to the reason, all
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 related companies should do the proper investigation of card owner's financial background in order to minimize the defaulters list. In my opinion,
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 companies should always check the person's history before providing them card. I will share the reasons in the following paragraphs. The primary reason to agree with
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 is the statement is the irresponsible behaviour of young generation. People who have credit cards do not spend wisely and mostly do the impulsive buying. Due to the happy-go-lucky nature of the young generation, they do not think about paying back at the time of spending and eventually will fall into the trap of
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 companies.
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, I recently read a report in the Guardian, which published the report mentioned that more than 70% of people are less than 30 years of age in the non-payer’s list. Another persuasive reason is the financial status of the people. Credit cards should not be given to the people who cannot pay back
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 in case of unforeseen circumstances. Banks should always choose people whose financial background is strong and can repay
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 even in adverse situation
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 as loss of job, loss in business. Individuals who are strong from
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finance point
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a finance point
 will settle the amount in any status.
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