Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employers' organizations say that in global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views?

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Employee
get
salary
budget in the base of their skills and experiences. High post workers are paid
extremely
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Extremely
large wages that subordinates. Companies say that, if they pay high amount, it will be easy to find out talented person. I
am totally agreed
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totally agree
with that because the fact that topper level senior have more responsibilities and it’s
also
motivate
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motivating
the other
employee
to do
work
even harder.
First
and foremost, when the
employee
is preferring
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prefers
to
high post
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the high post
high posts
, they need to take more responsibility
than
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Than
under their workers and that’s why they deserve
huge
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a huge salary
salary
.
Such
as, the
employee
who
work
as a
CEOs
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CEO
and have 10 to 12-year experience they have very tight and responsible schedule towards
work
, means that company’s all burden on
him
male possessive pronoun
his
head as compared to 1 to 2
year
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years
experience
employee
only responsible for their simple and regular
work
.
Therefore
, it
is always sound
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always sounds
reason that they allow to pay more for their responsibility.
Moreover
, an attractive
salary
work
as a motivation for a worker as do
work
harder to reach the top
position
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Position
. And it will help to get better output for
company
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the company
and healthy competition between colleague.
For instance
, one survey conducted by employment origination in the Times Of India
reveal
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reveals
that
company
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the company
which
is pay
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is paying
has paid
different
salary
to all
employee
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employees
grow more that 40% than company that pay the equal amount to all. Ergo, it is
best way
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the best way
to attract staff to do
work
hard. In conclusion, I feel that it is crucial to pay more money for higher post because of their responsibility
and
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And
its
also help
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also helps
to motivate
worker
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workers
a worker
the worker
to do
work
diligenetly
with diligence; in a diligent manner
diligently
.
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