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Some people in developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibility towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is believed that people are surrounded by
environment
 at every moment and at every step.The
environment
 is the backbone of the earth.The earth has 72 percent water content and has a lot of trees in some areas.The
environment
consist
Suggestion
consists
 of plants
,
Accept space
,
animals
,
Accept space
,
biotic and abiotic resources.People all over the world make
use
 of these resources to make life possible on earth. We have seen that people in the developing countries are less cautious about the implications of the ill effects of the
environment
 as compared to people in the developed countries.People in the developed countries make the
environment
clearner
a preparation used in cleaning something
cleaner
cleaners
 by making
use
 of the garbage bins.They focus mainly on car pooling and making
use
 of public transport so that the harmful gases
emmitted
expel (gases or odors)
emitted
 by the vehicles can be reduced to a certain extent. But people in the developing countries are not at all aware of the ill effects of the
environment
.They make
use
 of more and more cars, do make
use
 of public transport and
thus
 increasing the level of pollution in the
environment
. It has been rightly said that
Team work
Suggestion
Teamwork
 is the ability to work
in
Suggestion
on
common vision
Suggestion
a common vision
.
People
Suggestion
The people
 of
the the
definite article
the
 developed and the developing countries should make efforts to save the
environment
.
It
Suggestion
It's
 not the individual
effort but
Accept comma addition
effort, but
 the combined effort each individual should make towards the desired goal.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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