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Band 4

Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples.

Climate
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change
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is
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has
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becoming
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become
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 a huge concern for
scientist
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scientists
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 and
people
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 recently
due to
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impact
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the impact
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 it has had on our
life
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lives
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. Some
people
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 believe that we have to
change
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 our
energy
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 source to reduce the consequence of
climate
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change
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,
however
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,
other
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others
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 think fossil fuel has a major role in industries and they are not able to curb it. I believe that we need to reduce the amount of fossil fuel. Green
houses
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house
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 gases
is
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are
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 one of the main reason which
is contribute
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contributes
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 to
the
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apply
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climate
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change
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.
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 we need to consider it as
significant
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a significant
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issue
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 and initiate some measurement.
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 fossil fuels is one of
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this
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these
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measurement
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measures
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will
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that will
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 assist in the fight against
climate
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change
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.
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instance
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government
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 should encourage
people
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 to install solar batteries on the roof of their
building
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buildings
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.
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Moreover
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climate
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change
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 in the long term could
impact
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on
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apply
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all
aspect
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aspects
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 of our
life
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lives
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such
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health
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as health
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, weather,
food
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and food
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. Most of
animal
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the animal
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 species have already
die
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died
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 out
due to
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climate
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change
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 . water supply
are
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is
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 contaminated In conclusion , There are so many causes
for
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of
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 global warming and
climate
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change
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such
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 as
deforestations
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deforestation
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,
lack
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and lack
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 of fertilization. As a
consequences
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consequence
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,
sea
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the sea
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 level is getting higher, ice
mountain
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mountains
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 are melting. I don’t think burning fuels are the main source of
problem
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the problem
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 of
climate
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change
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. the world population is significantly growing and need to make
proper
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a proper
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 amount of
product
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products
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 for them. To run industrial smoothly, fuels
needs
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need
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 to be accessed easily, alternative
energy
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 like solar power takes
lot
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a lot
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 of space and there is
not
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no
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a
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apply
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guarantee that we will get sufficient
energy
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 in time.
In
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For
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 rainy
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reasons
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reason
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reason,
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its
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it's
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 obviously clear we
wont
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won't
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get enough
energy
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 for solar power. Writing 2 17/05/20 Today more
people
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 are overweight than
even
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ever
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 before, What
in
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is
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you
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your
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 opinion are the primary
cause
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causes
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 of
this
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? What
measure
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measures
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 can you be taken to overcome
this
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 epidemic? There is no denying that
people
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 are more suffering from overweight
compare
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compared
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 to the past. In my opinion there are several reasons contribute to
this
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issue
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such
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 as unhealthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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,
social
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and social
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 and economic problems in some
counties
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countries
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. I believe that the
government
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 should come forward with some plan to reduce the
impact
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this
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of this
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issue
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. It
true
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is true
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 that our lifestyle could have a significant
impact
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 on our physical and mental
health
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. The lack of regular
execesie
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exercise
 and
balanced
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a balanced
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 diet would be one of the main
reseaon
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reasons
of
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for
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overweight
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being overweight
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.
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instance
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people
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 are reluctant to attend
to
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apply
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the gym
due to
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 cost and difficulties in gym membership commitment . In my
view
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view,
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government
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 should encourage citizens with different strategies
such
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 as providing more facilities in
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the park
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park
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parks
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,
in
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and in
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community
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the community
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.
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Moreover
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health
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 education would be another option to increase
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people
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people's
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awarenss
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awareness
 of
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet and
the
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its
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 effect of it on their
heath
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health
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.
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Secondly
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 social and economic
problem
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problems
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 could affect
peoples
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people's
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 life in some countries,
for example
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 when
people
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 are
struggeling
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struggling
for
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with
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 basic needs they would able to think about
other
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another issue
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issue
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.
In addition
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 physical
health
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oclud
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has
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impact
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an impact
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 on mental
health
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.
Reserch
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Research
 has shown that
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of
motivation
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motivation,
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people
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 are not able to manage their
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. So I believe that the
government
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 should consider some
finicial
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financial
 support for
people
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 to reduce their
presuure
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pressure
.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy sources
  • economic collapse
  • fossil fuels
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • alternative resources
  • clean energy
  • technological advancements
  • government subsidies
  • energy transition
  • reliability
  • job creation
  • economic benefits
  • global warming
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • innovation
  • infrastructure
  • regulatory framework
  • energy efficiency
  • climate resilience
  • decarbonization
  • socioeconomic impact
  • energy security
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