Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Right now almost 8
billions
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billion
people are living on our planet, huge number of men and women and each of them has particular qualities, which can be limitations or dignities and have in impact on personal life and
job
. Unfortunately, the modern society has a lot of gender stereotypes, which limit
job
opportunities. We live in the age of computer technology and social media, but there are areas,
for example
, science and technology, in which work female have a lot of problems and receive less salary (the difference is about 27%). As well as women are
lay
set down according to a plan
laid
off, because they have children or they are pregnant. They lose
them
of them or themselves
their
job
30% more often
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
men.
It
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Its
the same time men are criticized, if they work in typical women areas, like a beauty sphere or kindergartener. Society forces people chose a
job
, which lives up to expectations. With regards to the question of dismissals existing stereotypes cause the development of psychological problems, which influence on workability, it could be the reason for
notice
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the notice
. And another problem is gender discrimination in employment; about 80% of potential workers were discriminated
at
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in
employment. All of
this
affects both employer and employee. In conclusion, gender inequality in a working area is a very
impotent
of great significance or value
important
problem, because if we want have society, which is progressing, we have to win all of
serotypes
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the stereotypes
stereotypes
. The existence of
this
problem is as few steps back in the development of our society. All of us have to protect
own
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ownership
rights and chooses that field of activity, which they like.
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