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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter. Describe the item Explain where and when you left it Say what action you would like the company to take

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I am writing
this
 letter requesting your help in finding a mobile phone, which I have lost on a train during my daily commute. I use your services daily for my commute from home to office and back. Every day, I board the same train from Malad, which departs for Churchgate at 9.00 am. Like always, I have kept my mobile phone in my bag, which I later kept
it
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in the overhead space. After I alighted from the train, I was unable to find my mobile phone in its designated place. I am assuming that it might have slipped from my bag and will be lying in the overhead space. For your information, it was a black
color
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 iPhone X which was gifted to me by my parents on my 25th birthday. It is embellished with
golden
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a golden
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 cover with my name indented on it. I will be grateful if you can help to find it and safely hand it over to me. If you have any information, feel free to reach me on 8291706102 or drop a mail
on
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 [email protected]. I look forward to hearing from you.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable
  • distinguishing features
  • route
  • carriage
  • seat number
  • lost and found department
  • appropriate steps
  • contact information
  • swift and positive action
  • item of value
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