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Many employers find that their new employees lack sufficient interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes? What are some possible solutions?

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Business owners today observe that new employees often
lack
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 cooperative
communication
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 skills and with many employers that their employees do not have the
communication
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 skills necessary to handle a job well. Reasons for
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 include
lack
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 of connectivity and
lack
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 of listening, understanding and a number of measures that can be taken to address
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 problem. The
first
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 cause of
lack
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 of
communication
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 is
lack
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 of connectivity, because they are new employees they are afraid to contact people who think they are lonely and not respected in the
group
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.
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, they use technology a
lot so
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lot, so
 the
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 daily
communication
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.
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, the
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 reason is
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 of listening, understanding. They always think that talking a lot is showing their intelligence not listening to others.
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, to address the above
causes company
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causes a company
 can organize parties to communicate with other
people expand
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people, expand
communication
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 relationship more confident
,
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,
 increase the interpersonal skill.
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, most companies usually organize year-round
meals employees
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meals, employees
 to eat and meet each other.
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, as a member of the
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, you must respect and listen to the opinions of others help me to know a lot of information and contributes to the cohesion between the numbers.
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, during
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 meetings we need to listen to
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 members present and we should contribute their ideas to the team work better and show cohesion. In conclusion, the
lack
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 of basic
communication
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 skills in new employees comes from the
lack
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 of connection and listening, understanding there are some possible solutions to
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 problem.

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