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Some people believe that governments should spend money on building trains and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads are the better way to reduce traffic connections. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few individuals think that in order to decrease
road
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traffic
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 funds should be given
in
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 establishing trains and underground tubes by
government
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the government
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.
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, Others opine that creating extra and broader
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road
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roads
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 is the best solution to deal with mass jams. In my viewpoint, rails and metros are more helpful in reducing congestion. It is considered by many that railways and tubes carry many
people
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 at
same
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time
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 so it is useful in dealing with the
traffic
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 caused by commuters.
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 them, most of the office workers would leave at
same
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time
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 of the day so getting
subway
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the subway
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inspite
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in spite
 of
private
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the private
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 car is beneficial as it is
time
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 efficient
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safest means of transport.
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, In
Delhi
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Delhi,
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 government
build
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built
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 new metros as a result morning and evening
traffic
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declines
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declined
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gradually,
according to
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 some research. Some
people
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 support the opinion that designing new and extensive
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road
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roads
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 would help in
dimnishing
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diminishing
 the
traffic
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 gridlock. They believe that by building
seperate
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separate
 lanes for buses,
cars
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, heavy moving vehicles and bicycles
avoidation
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validation
of
traffic
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 become possible. They argue that
People
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 in train feels like " sardines in a can". So for their
convinience
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convenience
 roads should be created
widee
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wide
wider
. To illustrate, In London,
seperate
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separate
 lanes are given to heavy moving vehicles on highways
due to
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 which the problem caused by
slow moving
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vehides
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vehicles
 is terminated, In my viewpoint, developing underground rails is better as it is cheaper to use
as well as
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 it does not
emittes
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emits
emitted
emitters
 any harm full gases in
air
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the air
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 which reduce the global problem of pollution and
road
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traffic
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.
Moreover
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, using private
cars
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 for
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same destination is futile as it only increases the
numbers
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number
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 of
cars
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 on
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road
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the road
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 and
create
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noise
polllutionalso
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pollution also
. In conclusion, creating wider roads are wastage of money as it does not motivate
people
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 to reduce
the
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dependance
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dependence
 on
Cars
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. Using Subway and rails for daily life and for work saves
the
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apply
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time
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,
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and
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money and helps
in decreasing
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decrease
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the
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apply
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road
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traffic
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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