The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graphic in the image illustrates the number of both female and male working class
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the Republic of Freedonia.
This
specific graphic refers to a few segments of employment like manufacturing, communications, banking, wholesale and retail trade, public sector non-defence and defence. The report is made in the year 1975
,
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and has been made on a number of a thousand people
women
(red dot), and
men
(black dot). For a larger view of the picture, it can be very easy to observe the fact that
men
outnumber
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women
in every sector of work.
This
result reveals that the
women
in that time
of
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period are being seen just as a housewife, and work is not for them,
while
the
men
are more needed, mostly in the manufacturing and public sector, where the feminine gender is close to zero.
On the other hand
, on a closer look over the image, we can see that
women
have a very good development in speaking skills. Looking at the screen we can tell that
women
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and
men
employed in that part
is
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almost the same, around 300 in total.
Overall
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on the graphics, the masculine working class in Freedonia tends to have an advantage in obtaining a job;
therefore
a woman needs to fight more to be hired.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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