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Now more than ever, people are aware of the importance of good health. Unfortunately, many have poor lifestyle habits that are difficult to break. It is crucial for people to adopt better physical and dietary routines if they expect to improve their health. Which of the following do you think is the best way to stay in good health? - Participating in group sports - Learning how to cook healthy meals - Joining a gym and following a strict exercise routine

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This
 pandemic has been a rude awakening to most of us and alarmed us about how taking care of our health and well-being should be one of the most essential part of life.
Majority
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The majority
 of the
polulation
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
 in India, especially the older generation is negligent about their lifestyle. These habits are built over the years and are especially hard to change. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the various measures one needs to adapt to stay healthy. While some may
aruge
present reasons and arguments
argue
 that just
persuing
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
 physical fitness is enough, I believe that working on your body as well as taking care of your diet go hand in hand. If you need something to motivate
youself
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
 to take up some physical
activity
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activity, then
then
 group sport is a good idea. It not only motivates you, but it is
also
 enjoyable since you have others to compete with.
Secondly
, physical activity is not enough for overall well-being. Taking care of
ones
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one's
 diet and learning how to put together a healthy meal is equally important.
Lastly
, the question arises if enrolling
into
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in
 a gym for a regular routine is as important. In my opinion, till you are putting in efforts to
workout
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work out
 regularly through various activities of your choice, going to the gym is not essential. In conclusion, I would like to state that an equal emphasis on both food habits and physical
acitivity
any specific behavior
activity
 in your daily life is essential for a healthy lifestyle.
Submitted by Suneela Phatak on

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