employers should pay young people the same salary as older colleagues doing the same job.

Young and
old
Suggestion
older
workers doing the same job should perceive the same wage regardless of their age.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly disagree with
this
statement.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that older employees have more experience compared to the younger group.
this
Suggestion
This
lead to better result because more experienced workers know how to deal with different situation that they may have encountered in the past and know how to take decision based on previous experience. For
this
reason old workers can work faster and more precisely compared to the younger group. In the same amount of time an experienced employer performs better in quality and quantity of the job.
on
Suggestion
On
the other hand, for young workers
this
lack of experience slows down their job. They normally don't are in power to make decisions and needs to rely to their supervisors. For
this
reason older and more experienced workers need to be paid more than their younger colleagues because normally they are more productive and make decision that imply a higher level of responsibility.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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