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men hold 62% of manager positions to women 38% men are said to make better. how far do you agree with this statement.

It is said that males and females differ in many aspects due to their natural genders.
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, many people advocate that some types of works suitable for men, and women are good in other kind of jobs;
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, I strongly believe that, there no discrimination between males and females in terms of job opportunities. On the one hand, in modern era gender discrimination has decreased gradually;
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, it is scientifically proved that, men and women both are same for modern job opportunities
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 as, project manager roles, engineering works, health sectors and etc. In developed countries' government encouraging gender equality;
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, it will not be surprising seeing a woman on project manager post in a large construction project.
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, some people disagree with gender equality;
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, it is difficult to perform each and every task for women in the workplace.
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, in
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 world countries, women still facing and struggling for adequate opportunities. So that man has become a leader in the industries. In conclusion,
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 research shows that males are a leader in managerial positions;
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, I reaffirm my position that both are equal in my opinion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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