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Many high level positions in companies is filled by the men but the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays, the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent
female but
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female, but
 only men hold many high level positions in companies.
However
, according to recent researches, more women as successful leader than men. Women have several advantages over men.
First
 of all, the women can have empathy for other ones.
Also
, they have ability to recognize emotion, understand other people’s perspectives on a situation. It’s easy for them to get effective methods to identify and meet customer,
patner
a person's partner in marriage
partner
, colleague needs.
Besides
, it’s one of
good
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the best
the better
skills
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skill
 to connect, get closer to each other. That
advandge
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
 support the women who build a stable, enthusiasm staff for company.
Secondly
, meticulous is
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an
 essential skill in all work. Women usually pay attention to
smallest details
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the smallest details
 which are important things produces better results because they can reduce mistakes. In
daly
every day; without missing a day
daily
 life, we often feel comfortable when we meet a tailor, a hairdresser carefully, or we do business with a thorough partner.
Moreover
, women’s
merticulousness
strict attention to minute details
meticulousness
have
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has
affect
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affected
 other staffs. In conclusion, I think women in high-level positions are not only important to gender equality
issues but
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issues, but
also
 has positive implication for the development of these countries and businesses.
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