Most high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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The management level of international corporations is generally dominated by men, even women contribute to over half of the labour force. So, some critics feel that a portion of superior positions should be preserved for female.

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mployment policy.

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with, meritocracy should be the primary factor for corporations to hire employees, especially for higher rank jobs. Given that senior staffs need to make critical business decisions as well as oversee the company's operation to generate profit for shareholders. Only the most capable persons should be the ones in charge.

Therefore

, sex should have little impact on the allocation of top positions.

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, reservation of positions to female is a kind of

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discrimination

to other male candidates.

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, female candidates are easier to be qualified for the vacancy whereas male who are superior to them, are eliminated.

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is unfair to men with better capabilities. Not to mention that little positions are intentionally distributed to men in

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emale dominated industry as well.

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, it is unreasonable for women to have

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the same job. In conclusion, the strongest candidates should win the job and a slight advantage in the hiring process for women would be unfair to men.

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, companies should allocate jobs regardless of people's gender.

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olicy due to the rise of feminism today.

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