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Most high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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The management level of international corporations is generally dominated by men, even women contribute to over half of the labour force. So, some critics feel that a portion of superior positions should be preserved for female.
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mployment policy.
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, sex should have little impact on the allocation of top positions.
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, reservation of positions to female is a kind of
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discrimination
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, female candidates are easier to be qualified for the vacancy whereas male who are superior to them, are eliminated.
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emale dominated industry as well.
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the same job. In conclusion, the strongest candidates should win the job and a slight advantage in the hiring process for women would be unfair to men.
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, companies should allocate jobs regardless of people's gender.
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olicy due to the rise of feminism today.

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