In many schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g. languages) and boys choose science subjects (e.g. Physics). What do you think are the reasons? Do you think that this tendency should be changed?

There is no doubt that there is a common pattern in choosing
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based on gender. It has been noticed languages are usually
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by girls
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which
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based on Science in both schools and colleges. In my opinion, I firmly consider
this
is because ladies have an innate linguistic ability;
however
,
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brain modulated to know more scientific facts. The primary reason for the course preference is
due to
genetic makeup.
In other words
, the brain is differently orchestrated in both
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since the time of
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period, the variation can be found.
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that
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our patriarchal society conditions the boys to select the subject.
In many
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scientific journals,
for example
, Nature, have published articles about
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topic and they provided
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evidence which firmly confirms the reason for preference
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different sex is
due to
genetics. Despite the above-mentioned argument, I consider
this
situation has to be changed for a good reason. Currently, everybody supports gender equality in all
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of life,
this
should be even reflected in the education
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as well. It is seen that if girls are motivated to select science-related subjects like boys, slowly, they can prove that they are equally good
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this
. There are many lady superstars already holding various significant positions,
for instance
, Prathibha Patel, Preethi Patel and so on. The constant effort and motivation would create a female-friendly society. In conclusion, It has been found that the election of course work is varied among each sex. In my opinion,
this
trend has to be changed, even
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is
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. It is predicted that
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with equal opportunity for all kinds of sex
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will flourish better than others.
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