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Question:-Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

#-some #people #debt #don’t #can’t #behaviour #action
Despite some person’s lending
money
 from others to buy unnecessary stuff not only they couldn’t afford but unusable
also
.The main reason behind
this
 is advertisements become persuaded them to purchase new things and the solution for
this
 his government educate them
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how to save
money
. On the one hand, these days human beings lured to promotions and it might make them
to
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purchase many things even they don't
needed
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need
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.
Besides
,advertising manipulates
the
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individuals for buying their products in order to increase
the
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consumer rates.Meanwhile,media and social networking sites
has
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 a major role to impose the people to run through the promotions.
For instance
,All the Banks provides credit cards for the people who have
a
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ccount to increase their profits.So,they are consuming these cards to buy off the things from the market.
On the other hand
,the main solution for
this
 behaviours
are
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 to educate
the
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individuals from spending
money
for
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 unwanted items.
Furthermore
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the government should make some funding system to save
money
further
.It might get an awareness them how to prohibit these kinds of purchases as well.
For instance
,if the bank gives special schemes to prevent the use of credit cards,it would be helpful for them to tackle the problems. In conclusion,the main causes of debts in individuals will be the advertisements and they should get to know the dangers of
expensing
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money
 for unnecessary things.
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