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The picture below shows the Use of renewable energy accounting for the total energy from 1971 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main feature and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates how much renewable
energy
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 was consumed by 6 distinct countries over the course of 40 years from 1917 to 2011. Overall, it is clear that the amount of
energy
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 used in those nations experiences an upward trend except for Finland. Another interesting point is that while Finland registers the highest figures, United Kingdom has the lowest rate of power usage throughout the given period. The rate of renewable
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 using in the United States stood at 2,5 per cent of the total
energy
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 in 1971. After that,
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 figure fluctuated dramatically in the
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 25 years till 1996 before witnessing the two folds soaring from 10% (in 1996) to nearly 20% (in 2011). In additions, a similar trend could be seen in Denmark, which rose by 2,5% beginning with 15% in 1917 and ending with roughly 17,5% in the year of 2011.
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, France, Germany and the United Kingdom were the 3 countries that had the quantity of renewable power-consuming went up progressively without any strong fluctuation. By 2011, the proportions of renewable
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 used by French and German were around 15% that much higher than that of people in the United Kingdom which just above 5%.
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