Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.

Holidays
plays
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an important role in human life. Long term vacation given to staff members by owners encourage them to give extra potential at
work
.
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essay will discuss how giving long holidays help them to do their job
more well
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.
Firstly
,
e
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mployee
feel
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fresh when they come back to
work
from holidays.It is seen that people normally spend their whole
time
at
work
and at home , which makes them so irritating.Giving them long holidays where they can release their
all
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tension and give fresh start again.
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, research shows that when someone working
continuely
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continually
for a long
time
his working capacity
start
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decreasing and that person cannot give their best at
work
.
In addition
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vacations help staff to give a new start with fresh feel and joy.
Secondly
,company status
seen
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as a more respective way employee in.eye. It is
u
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niversal fact that when you take care of someone
then
f
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ront person
also
return you that value in more. In
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schedule working individual cannot even give
time
to their children and parents. long holidays help them to spend quality of
time
with
f
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amily member .Spending
time
with family helps them to reduce the
work
burden and enjoy those moments.
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people
lives
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too far away from home for job purpose and giving them vacations to spend
time
with family helps to regain the energy again
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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