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Paying all employees the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Paying all employees the same
salary
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 in a
company
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 promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues. I strongly disagree with
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 statement for several reasons.
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, in most scenarios apical positions,imply a huge level of responsibility in roles
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 as manager or director.
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, apical position in most cases require people that have more experience compared to young employees.
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, they are in the '
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position
 of taking a decision that involves the whole
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 and workers.
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, directors and managers normally generate the vast majority of the profit. To cite an example, sales director actions account for 60% of the total revenue in nearly every big
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. for these reasons,they should receive a higher
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 compared to inexperienced and fresh employees.
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, having the same
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 in a
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 could lead to bad situations as workers are less motivated to reach a better result or to get a promotion.
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,they might start looking for other vacancies where they could obtain a higher wage. Studies suggest that companies with proportionated salaries perform better compared to companies that offer the same wage.
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, I worked in a
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 with a fixed
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 and I ended up looking for another position after just one year.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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