Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion.
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a
company
offers to their employees for subscription Change to a plural noun
companies
membership
of gyms and sports club to improve their workforce. Some people opine that this
is nothing but w
aste of money. I will give my stance with arguments in the below paragraphs.
On the one hand, companies who Add an article
a
does
not provide Change the verb form
do
this
subscription of membership
of gyms and sports clubs what
makes their employe's healthy think that Change the pronoun
which
,
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apply
this
money can be used elsewhere. Such
as,
medical insurance rather than Remove the comma
apply
membership
of g
ym. Add an article
the
Furthermore
, in some job sector employees have to maintain v
ery strict schedule, Add an article
a
thats
why they can not make enough time to do exercise. Correct your spelling
that's
For example
, employers think that if one employee spend
time on Change the verb form
spends
g
ym or sports club, the time of work might be reduced.
Add an article
a
On the other hand
, those employeers
who offers their Correct your spelling
employers
employees
empolyees
to Correct your spelling
employees
membership
of gym
and sports clubs thinks that it is reduced to take sick leave. For instance
, research conducted to show that, if an employee exersice
four times in a week the sick leave will be reduced by half. In Correct your spelling
exercise
exercises
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addition
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ym for Add an article
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intaracting
with each other and Correct your spelling
interacting
this
creates socialism. For example
, it is a good source of marketing and advertising of the
specific company.
In conclusion, as per my opinion, employers who do not provide these types of subsidized Change the article
a
membership
they will suffer in the long run rather than saving money. By contrast
, those who offers
these memberships will get Change the verb form
offer
a
healthy and joly minded employees.Remove the article
apply
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