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Band 5.5

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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A section of
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society
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 believes that higher wages have more values than
work
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 fulfilment in
life
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. I tend to disagree with
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 view. I am of the opinion that
work
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satisfaction
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 is more important than
money
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 earned from that
job
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. Ideas articulated
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 in
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 discourse will support my stand and at the same time highlight certain contradictory views that others in the
society
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 might possibly have. The primary reason for my belief is inner pleasant, which gain
work
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 fulfilment. When a person is doing any
work
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 with full dedication gives more positive vibration which increases joy in
life
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.
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estaurant makes more delicious dishes, if fully enjoys the
work
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 with inner contentment. Another reason for me to uphold my view is self-confidence increase with
work
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satisfaction
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. When
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erson is fully satisfied with the employee will
work
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 with more confidence compared to who are just working mechanically to complete their task.
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, one of the economic surveys shows that for administrative jobs people are more efficient and confident in their
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 who are love their
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 despite
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lower salary.
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,
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ndividual in the
society
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 who are to the outlook that
money
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 is more important than
work
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 fulfilment. One of the possible reasons for
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 view is materialism. People think that only
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 can buy all the comfort of
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 and they start to believe
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 comfort is only given happiness in
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.
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 estimation, perhaps, stems from the fact that
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 is more valuable at the time of retirement. The reason behind that most of all underdeveloped country has less social security benefits at the time of the end of employment due to retirement. To conclude, these surely are those in the
society
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 who seem to be convinced with fact that
money
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 is more important for
life
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 enjoyment and retirement security and they assumingly have all right reasons to back their conviction. I,
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, am of the firm opinion that
work
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satisfaction
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 is more important over the
job
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 because it increases moral values of the person which leads to internal happiness, and
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 shows
job
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satisfaction
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 is more valuable in the
life
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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