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Do young people today make good use of their leisure time? Or do they spend too much time watching television and playing video games, instead of taking part in more productive activities? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many of us state that young people spending most of their leisure time not productively and unhealthy by playing
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 games, watching TV. Others,
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dvantages and disadvantages. Some experts believe that young people are becoming more and more addicted to
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 games and TV shows. Because of
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they do not spend a lot of time outdoor, do fewer physical activities and having
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intimidating numbers in children’s obesity among kids between 6 – 14 years. Around 60% of kids between
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edentary lifestyle.
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 gaming can lead to mental disorders like depression and uncontrolled anxiety. To avoid these mental problems doctors recommend to allocate at least a few hours outdoor.
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 problems among the kids. A striking example that can illustrate
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 gaming or watching can be a good stress relief for
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oung generation and does not have
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egative impact on their
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. In conclusion, it has been seen that both opinions have their own advantages and disadvantages. I strongly believe that moderated
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 gaming and television can positively affect our brain and help handle stress,
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