The rate of unemployment in some countries is high. Because of this, there is no need to complete an education beyond a primary school level. Write an essay either for or against this position. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Undoubtedly, nowadays, the unemployment rate has risen and

as a result

less

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career opportunities there are.

Therefore

, a significant proportion of graduates think of finding

a temporary positions

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a temporary position

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instead

of entering higher

education

and acquiring a university degree.

However

, in my opinion, these two facts should not be confused because

education

yourself is vital not only to get a

job

in the

future

but

also

is beneficial for your progressing to a useful individual. So, no matter the situation which is prevailed

at

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the

job

market, higher

education

must be supported and promoted. Little do we know about what will happen in

job

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the job

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market in the

next

decade. Having said that, the thing that we can be sure of is the importance of

education

.

To begin

with, someone who invests in his

education

, except

from

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the learning

the

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he gets,

also

improves his mental health. More specifically, entering the university

in

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is

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not only about studying but

also

socialising and exposing yourself to

the

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new experiences.

For instance

, through

university

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,university

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we are taught crucial values

such

as approaching new people with ease, expressing our emotions, thinking outside of a box and challenging our

believes

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beliefs

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by getting out of our comfort zone.

Such

important qualifications from our life in the

future

.

Moreover

, in the wake of high

unemployment

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the

education

has a more signification role than ever before. Studying a subject that you love and become an expert

make

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you more competitive in the

job

market. Gaining

such

qualifications allows us to secure a position with more ease and confidence. In conclusion, we should not forget the present by thinking only about the

future

, but

firstly

, we ought to invest in ourselves at the present in order to get the maximum profits in the

future

and

this

thing can only happen through

education

.