Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more of a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what an individual really wants to do in his spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

People
like to do some activities for their entertainment in the extra
time
, whenever
,
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they get out of their busy schedules. They make these their
hobbies
or gradually they develop their interest in these. Some of them do have their own interests to be fulfilled in their free
time
but, many tend to follow the overall
trends
and fashions in their spare
time
too. Most of the
people
make their
hobbies
which are practised commonly and are affected by the present fashions and latest
trends
which are ought to change sooner or later. They think that
doing
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so they will be at the same level where the others are in society and for
some
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these are a status symbol too. Children get affected quickly
for instance
previously collecting stamps, coins, cards of movies, etcetera and playing with these was a major hobby. All these are outdated now and overtaken by internet surfing, playing video games and watching television. Youngsters to do not want themselves lagging behind and they follow the new
trends
immediately. They mostly follow the factions of
glamour
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world, boys start joining gyms and girls become interested in the beauty techniques. Some of these are motivated by their parents, guardians or near and dears to opt for a particular activity by saying them be a modern person and be up to date.
Although
they might be having their interest in some other activity.
Moreover
, the advanced technology plays its role too by impacting both urban and rural
people
through various satellite channels on television, the internet, etcetera, they developed their
hobbies
accordingly
But, there are other
people
who have definite entertaining ways to be practised in their extra
time
. These may be like playing golf, volleyball, football, cricket or going for a long walk, etcetera. Alike these, painting, drawing, playing some musical instrument which is performed by some at any cost. Most of these persons are of a little elder age group who may find these something different from their hectic schedules. To conclude, there are
people
who fulfil their interests and enjoy their
hobbies
in their free
time
but, most of the
people
are dominated by the latest fashions and
trends
in choosing their
hobbies
.

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