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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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 at work; thereby,
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satisfaction
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 is concerned as a major element of individual well-being. It is indisputable that working overloaded can cause mental problems to
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. I think that
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nowadays. There are several factors of
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 that promote
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individual well-being
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 fair salary and
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 working environment. These factors can contribute
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satisfaction
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will enhance
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the mental
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 health of
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, there are many
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 who committed suicide from working overloaded in Japan.
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, the government promotes the
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satisfaction
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 policy for the companies to follow the rules to reduce
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 tragic phenomenon.
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, the expectation of
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satisfaction
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 for all
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 is now increasing because
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 about their happiness and well-being, especially in the new generation like Gen Y and Gen Z.
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satisfaction
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 can be realistic if the company raises the awareness of morals and ethics in their workplace and the government should concern on
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 problem as well. In conclusion, there are many factors of
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satisfaction
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 that can contribute well-being of
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 and I believed that it can be done by the company, the government and all
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 together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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