Many high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent females. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most of the top
positions
in several companies are occupied by males even though more than
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50
percent
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per cent
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of
workforce
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the workforce
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is females in many developed countries. I strongly disagree
to
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the notion that the
firm's
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firms
firm
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should provide a fixed proportion of
top level
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top-level
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job
positions
to
women
. It is a false notion to allocate a certain portion of
high level
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high-level
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designation to
women
,
however
, the allocation should only
based
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on the educational qualification and the ability to manage while in a higher
position
, rather than selecting them on a gender basis or by giving a reservation to
women
. Only the apt person who is well talented should be considered to the same.
Moreover
, the experience of that person should be considered as he gained better knowledge which is enough to managerial
positions
, whereas, if a
under
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experienced
women
with lack of talent is in the top
position
, it can be the only reason to
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shut down
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shutdown
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the company.
In addition
, if a fixed percentage of top
position
is reserved for
women
, the eagerness for higher education for
women
will get reduced as they already have a reservation, so
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of qualified
women
get
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reduced.
Moreover
, the growth rate of
firm
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a firm
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get
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declined if
a
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professionaly
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professionally
professional
incompetent
women
occupy
in
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such
position
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. Even though not considering the gender as well as the reservations,
women
can be in higher
positions
if
she
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capable of.
For instance
, nowadays, several
women
work in managerial
positions
in many companies like
as
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in my company that I work. In conclusion, the reservations for
women
for
high level
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positions
should not be promoted and should
discouraged
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as it brings a depreciation in the economy of the country.
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