Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.
Employee is the blood of every organisation. In free vacation for their member of
this
modern era
most Add a comma
era,
of
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apply
the
people Correct article usage
apply
has
stress Change the verb form
have
especially
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, especially
worker
. Fix the agreement mistake
workers
However
, a fair amount of people think that employers should provide long vacation leave to workforce
in order to motivate the Add an article
the workforce
labour
to do their work Replace the word
labourers
effeciently
. I strongly agree with Correct your spelling
efficiently
this
statement because authority
person must give long day Correct article usage
the authority
holidays
for
their Change preposition
to
low level
people.
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low-level
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the Correct your spelling
On
one
hand, employer
should support Add an article
the employer
an employer
to
their staff because they are Change preposition
apply
done
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doing
job
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jobs
such
as production
department. Correct article usage
the production
Moreover
, if Add an article
a top
the top
top level
person wants to get more Add a hyphen
top-level
production
they will allow
to take more Wrong verb form
be allowed
holidays
because without stress and depression
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depression,
man
can do anything otherwise
is not possible. In addition
, a company
should arrangeAdd an article
a
workforce
in Add an article
the workforce
oder
to feel Correct your spelling
order
relax
and undoubtedly Wrong verb form
relaxed
production
and profit will increase when after holidays
. Correct article usage
the holidays
For instance
, one
of my friend
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friends
working
in a corporate Wrong verb form
works
company
which is IT
field. her Correct article usage
the IT
company
is
arranged 10 Verb problem
has
days
holiday for all Change noun form
days'
worker
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workers
in
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at
every
end of the year which Correct determiner usage
the
december
and most importantly without cost.
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is december
One
the other hand, without Correct your spelling
On
happy
nothing Replace the word
happiness
fullfill
. Correct your spelling
fulfil
This
means when staff feel happy to do work automatically production
ratio dramatically increasing
. Wrong verb form
increases
Furthermore
, job satisfaction is most important compare
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compared
than
others. Officers should treat Change preposition
to
to
personnel like Change preposition
apply
a
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apply
human
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humans
not
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, not
a
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apply
machine
. Fix the agreement mistake
machines
This
means they must give long leave in order to blue-coller
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blue-collar
worker
have
a chance to spend time with family. Change the verb form
has
Therefore
, depression
amount will decline drastically. Correct article usage
the depression
For example
, The
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An
Australia
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Australian
company
is given long
holiday for Add an article
a long
hired
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a hired
the hired
man
when Fix the agreement mistake
men
christmas
to new year approximately Change the capitalization
Christmas
minimum
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a minimum
2
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of 2
weeks
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weeks'
holidays
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holiday
gets
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for gets
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the Austalian
Austalian
public.
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Australian
To conclude
, every organisation must need
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needs
for
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apply
labourer
to finish Fix the agreement mistake
labourers
task
. Irrefutably machines Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
are being working
more Change the verb form
are being worked
are working
efficient
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efficiently
compare
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compared
than
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to
human
but Fix the agreement mistake
humans
man
must need to operate the machines. So employers can provide long holidays
how they will arrange to the temporary worker
when permanant
staff is taken leave Correct your spelling
permanent
mean
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meanwhile
while
will use the sesonal
hired Correct your spelling
seasonal
man
. Is it possible to do?
The answer is undoubtedly it is possible and many companies are being Rephrase
so?
done
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apply
this
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