Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work? What factors should be taken into consideration when recruiting staff for sales positions?

The marketing department is the key sector of every firm and these sectors can only create the demand
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the goods. Undoubtedly, the wholesale man is most important staff in every
oganaisation
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organisation
organization
especially merchantry firms.
However
, the merchantry enterprise should hire
person
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who
are
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starvate
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starvation
starving
and most devoted labours because retailing is the most key factor.
Nevertheless
, I do not think cash is the motive power behind
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hard work
.
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essay discusses what factors should be taken into view when
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the new man for
sales
positions.
To begin
with, I do not accept
this
statement which is
the
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money is the
motivate
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force in
back
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of
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hard work
because every person would like to work for their
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job
as well as they enjoy. If the labour loves their
job
, they will put on
hardwork
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hard work
in any work. The
sales man
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is working to their occupation how full
detication
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dedication
as well as
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, as well as job satisfaction and they,
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job
satisfaction and they do not care about the
amount
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of wages
this
means they are focusing only finish the target in order to achieve something.
For example
, one of my friend working in
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marketing field for
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five years and he earns
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amount of salary whereas he likes his
job
and he feels
job
satisfaction too.
Moreover
, there are many qualities need for
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position
such
as marketing
knowdelge
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knowledge
, good communication skills, smiling faces, patience,
experience
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the experience
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of
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retailing business, marketing degree qualification, innovative ideas,
creativity
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mind, calculating maths skills, bargaining power, and
last
but not least
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skills.
For instance
, many corporate companies
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recruit
sales people
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in
different
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way compared to other staff how they give
any one
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product at
canditate
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candidate
hand meanwhile the
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candidate
will
sales
the product in his way of idea in front of the employers
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therefore
the employer have to understand to the
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candidate
ability. To conclude, money is the most important things in nowadays irrefutably and all folks are
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continuously
running to earn capital whereas many
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has
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not
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about their salary when they are put
hardwork
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hard work
this
means they like to do their occupation
as a result
, they can live without stress and depression. I hope many other sector
employee
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also
doen
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does
not care about their amount of wages
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because
they
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only
concenrate
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concentrate
concentrated
to
detication
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dedication
of the work. The wholesaling enterprise should see in the above qualities when they want a new staff in
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department.
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