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Some employers want to be able to contacts their staff at a all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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In today's competitive world,few bosses prefer to make contacts with their
employees
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 while they are on vacations.I will discuss both pros and cons of
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To begin
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 with,if employers want to establish contacts with workers after office hours,it would be helpful for some people .
For instance
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,in case of emergency in the hospital,if the administration gets help from their staff,it would save the
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 of patients.
Moreover
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,for a company,some deals are very important to crack,so with the help of their
employees
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, the firm can win the deal.
On the other hand
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,there are some disadvantages of
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 development.
Firstly
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,disturbing
employees
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 on their holidays mean spoiling their relaxing days as well as moods.
Secondly
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,if they are forced to
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 after office hours,they will start taking
work
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 home, which makes them more pressured.
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 ,they would not able to concentrate on their
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 due to workload.
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,it will affect the mental health of them.
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 to it,some workers might feel miserable in their companies and they would start looking for other jobs.It would affect the growth of the company.
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,
employees
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 need to recharge themselves to break the monotony of everyday's
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.So ,they can come back to their
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 full of energy.But , snatching their private
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 , would lead to a loss of interest in the workplace. To conclude,
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,in some situations,contact to staff is very important like in emergencies.
However
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,worker's private
life
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 and mental health should be considered .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • downtime
  • responsiveness
  • invasion of privacy
  • employee morale
  • dedication
  • reliability
  • client relations
  • overworked
  • efficiency
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