Some people get into debt by buying thing they do not need and cannot afford. What is the reason for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Many
people
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using debit cards to acquire possession which is unnecessary and out of their reach. There
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number
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of reasons which I will
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describing
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reasonable
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world, everyone like to obtain expensive clothes and luxury life.
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human life easy but
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it is a kind of burden.
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,
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using
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card
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for getting new and high-priced possession for taking and uploading pictures on various social media
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as Facebook,Instagram,TikTok and so on.
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, the significant growth of many elite
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, that attract the masses in spending money on
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jewellery
,branded clothes and gadgets.
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, with the apply of
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credit
card
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people
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who have
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range of salary will
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obtain branded things.
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unnessary
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unnecessary
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ths
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this
the
debit will lead
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serious
problem
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for many of the
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card holders
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cardholders
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. There are several things that
people
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could do to mitigate the
problem
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. One of several
reason
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is that there should be provided
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clear regulation about
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a credit
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card
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that must be followed by banks and financial institution, regarding the process to get a credit
card
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. To ensure that every
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must have a
limit
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amount of access to
credit
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a credit
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card
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according to
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income.
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, for adding more
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into the cities
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, the government
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should
build more parks and children playgrounds.
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,
people
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should have more options for entertainments
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going to shopping
malls
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. To be concluded, it is true that
people
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facing
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any
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problem
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with
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debt for obtaining luxury and fancy goods. To solve
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problem
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,
government
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the government
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should build more recreational parks or area where
people
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shoud
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should
spend their time
instead
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of
malls
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Impulsive purchasing
  • Financial literacy
  • Debt management
  • Budgeting skills
  • Credit facilities
  • Emotional spending
  • Therapeutic shopping
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Credit card debt
  • Financial education
  • Social status
  • Retail therapy
  • Economic behavior
  • Spending patterns
  • Compulsive buying
  • Financial solvency
  • Advertising influence
  • Societal expectations
  • Long-term consequences
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