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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Technological advancements have been tremendously increasing since
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 century.
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 has been a concern to many
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 as they believe that
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this
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 transformation of
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 replaced
people
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 in the workplace. I disagree with the statement as
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 has made our lives easier. We have come so far in terms of
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 that every action we perform has one or the other machine involved. In process of
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reformation
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 some small jobs have been replaced with machines.
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, assembly line in factories has reduced the manpower required at industries. These kinds of transformations have been
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 of concern to some
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. The only way we can avoid
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 problems is to update our skills. No matter how many new technologies come and go, we can always keep improving our
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 and make
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 in
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 technologically advanced world.
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, a person who develops the robots can train many other individuals who can keep working on evolving
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technology
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. There is
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 manpower in every industry. The only thing that changed over
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 is mechanical work done
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people
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 is reduced and is transferred to machines. To conclude, I believe that improvement in terms of
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 is very important for our economy as well. The work done by machines is far more accurate and faster when compared to
people
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. So it is important for
technology
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 to evolve.
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 need to stop depending on manual work and focus more on how to improve their
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 so that we can create more employment.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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