Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
Technological advancements have been tremendously increasing since
18th
century. Correct article usage
the 18th
This
has been a concern to many people
as they believe that with
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apply
this
transformation of technology
have
replaced Change the verb form
has
people
in the workplace. I disagree with the statement as technology
has made our lives easier.
We have come so far in terms of technology
that every action we perform has one or the other machine involved. In process of this
reformation
some small jobs have been replaced with machines. Add a comma
,reformation
For example
, assembly line in factories has reduced the manpower required at industries. These kinds of transformations have been point
of concern to some Add an article
a point
the point
people
.
The only way we can avoid such
problems is to update our skills. No matter how many new technologies come and go, we can always keep improving our skill
and make Fix the agreement mistake
skills
mark
in Add an article
a mark
this
technologically advanced world. For instance
, a person who develops the robots can train many other individuals who can keep working on evolving of
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apply
technology
. There is requirement
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a requirement
the requirement
of
manpower in every industry. The only thing that changed over Change preposition
for
years
is mechanical work done Correct article usage
the years
people
is reduced and is transferred to machines.
To conclude, I believe that improvement in terms of Change preposition
by people
technology
is very important for our economy as well. The work done by machines is far more accurate and faster when compared to people
. So it is important for technology
to evolve. People
need to stop depending on manual work and focus more on how to improve their skill
so that we can create more employment.Fix the agreement mistake
skills
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