Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that people change their preference regarding
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hippies
hobbies
and interests based on what is trending rather than their true desires of doing what they want in their leisure. In my opinion, I tend to agree partly with
this
statement because not all individuals' leisure activities are determined by what is trending. The popularity of certain
hobbies
and interests are more likely to have an immense
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influence
on peoples' choices about spending their free time.
This
is because humans have
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instinct in following what most others are doing in order to become part of the group, which stimulates
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engage in trending activities.
For instance
, most
of
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the
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children and teenagers are playing popular video games
such
as
fortnite
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due to
its
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popularity among their peers rather than their preference for
this
type of
games
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.
This
would sometimes result in taking
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choices regarding how to spend their time effectively.
However
, not all chosen
hobbies
are based on a certain trend because it could be a passion that
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individuals for
practicing
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these
activites
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activities
inspite
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in spite
of their prominence. A typical example of
this
is that football has always been considered one of the dominant sports in the world, and many players dedicate a great time
in
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playing
this
sport as it is deemed as
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of their real desire and inclination.
As a result
, it justifies how these individuals excel in
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their
hobbies
during their leisure. In conclusion, while it's true that some
hobbies
are popular temporarily, I believe that there are some interests which can
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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