Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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One part of the community trusts that aggressive behaviours shown on the television as well as in the desktop games have a negative impact while

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the other part of the community disagree

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the statement that there is no

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influence on one's characters. In my opinion, I would argue that there is

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an inverse reaction on the society. Nowadays violence and other unethical actions are being normalized within us which should not be the case because young children are being exposed to

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be affected psychologically, due to the fact that teenagers spend

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higher amount of time on

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especially when it comes down to playing games online.

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, boys and men are addicted to

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action thrilling games rather than girls or women

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influences a person's behaviour.

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, the industries and production companies should reveal less aggressive actions

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morale.

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field which will

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on their lives in the near future,

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of thinking practically their natural response will be to throw a fit to solve the problem but

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, when we like

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and happen to spend time and energy on anything we are unlikely to get addicted to it.

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wrong as the adults might be in a delusion that it is cool ass depicted in movies or any platforms.

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, it may be concluded that violence on various

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platforms

has an undesired effect on us.

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0Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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