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Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing video games. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Many schools require their students to wear a
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 uniform, but recently
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 policy has been criticised as being old-fashioned and even oppressive. In my opinion,
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 are an essential component of
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 life and should be maintained for both practical and pedagogical reasons. The main reason for having a uniform policy is that every child can be treated equally. These days there is huge pressure, largely from social media, for young
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 to look good. Appearances matter to young
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 may suffer from abuse and bullying if their
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 are perceived as ‘uncool’. Having to wear the same
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 ensures that even
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 from disadvantaged backgrounds look the same as everyone else. The fact that
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 are generally inexpensive to buy helps in
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 argument in favour of
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 is that they give the child a sense of identity and make young
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 feel that they are part of a close
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 community within which they can help each other.
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 sense of belonging is increasingly important in a world where
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 are becoming more and more isolated by technology.
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, there are practical reasons why the tradition of
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 should be maintained.
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, they are a cheap and convenient way of making sure
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 dress smartly, relieving them of the pressure of deciding what to wear on a daily basis
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 so that they can focus their attention on their studies. While some
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 would be incompatible with certain types of classwork,
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 outfits are designed for comfort and complement the kind of activities that
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children
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 are engaged in. To conclude, I believe that the benefits of
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 far outweigh the drawbacks. If
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 want to express their individual style and taste through the way they dress, they have plenty of opportunities to do
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 in their free time.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical health
  • exercise and movement
  • social interaction
  • teamwork
  • communication skills
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • strategic thinking
  • hand-eye coordination
  • holistic approach
  • environmental awareness
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • obesity
  • posture
  • balance
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