The leaders or directors of organizations are often elder people. However, some says that young people can also take the lead of organization or companies. To what exttent do you agree or disagree?

Senior
people
are often being seen as having higher positions,
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of teams or organizations because of their experience.
However
, individuals argued that young
people
should give chance to lead a
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company
on
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of their new ideas which will play a significant
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. I strongly agree that power should be transferred to
yougesters
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youngsters
.
Firstly
, young
people
are
energatic
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energetic
and fully updated with latest technologies with skills which can bring positive changes in a company.
For example
, numerous students graduate from foreign universities and come back to their countries to serve. They may have a bundle of new ideas and well knowledged about modern technologies which paved their way to
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their home town.
However
, if they work with companies who are running by old
people
they
maynot
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may not
accept changes and will not agree to take
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risk
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.
Therefore
, if companies
gve
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give
gave
power to young
people
they can bring significant changes.
In addition
, young
people
will bring
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in
organization
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an organization
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which will lead to success and try new innovations,
thus
old
people
will
movtivate
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motivate
motivated
to learn new skills.
For instance
, old
people
are lack
behind
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technology
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field.
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, one of
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company
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,
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, in the world was established by a university graduate. It is clear that senior
people
can not survive only base on their experience
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until
they learn new technology and keep them updated. To conclude, I believe that giving key positions to
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youngsters
youngest
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will bring positive outcomes for companies because it brings
inovations
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innovations
innovation
as well as motivation for others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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