The leaders or directors of organizations are often elder people. However, some says that young people can also take the lead of organization or companies. To what exttent do you agree or disagree?

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of teams or organizations because of their experience.
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, individuals argued that young
people
should give chance to lead a
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company

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of their new ideas which will play a significant
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. I strongly agree that power should be transferred to
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Firstly
, young
people
are
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and fully updated with latest technologies with skills which can bring positive changes in a company.
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, numerous students graduate from foreign universities and come back to their countries to serve. They may have a bundle of new ideas and well knowledged about modern technologies which paved their way to
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their home town.
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, if they work with companies who are running by old
people
they
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accept changes and will not agree to take
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power to young
people
they can bring significant changes.
In addition
, young
people
will bring
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in
organization
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which will lead to success and try new innovations,
thus
old
people
will
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to learn new skills.
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, old
people
are lack
behind
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technology
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field.
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, one of
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, in the world was established by a university graduate. It is clear that senior
people
can not survive only base on their experience
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they learn new technology and keep them updated. To conclude, I believe that giving key positions to
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youngsters
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youngestrs
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will bring positive outcomes for companies because it brings
inovations
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innovations
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as well as motivation for others.
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