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Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree?

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value
 for essential workers like nurses,
doctors
 and teachers as some certain union
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discussions
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 shows and they
work
 for
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 as well. ,
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health
 and education
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 ruled by the government so
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inaccuracy
inaccurancy
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 of their outcome is not well. is any profession able to potential for
grow
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 huge
money
 the support will
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 nonconditionely
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this
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 going to
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analyze
 about the
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reasons
about
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for
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 the whole idea. Talking about
doctors
 and nurses their service is tremendous.
therefor
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 the wages come for them by power union of the country
however
 their
working
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work
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 is always framed they do nothing out of the frame
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that's
that
 how they trained in the schools but
their
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 so even they
work
 for long hours they can earn the overtime
salery
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salary
such
 as make some extra
money
 than their monthly payment,
therefore
 no one can neglect their importance for the whole universe.
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referre
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referred
 about the actors and directors at
this
 point their working is not as
doctors
 tasks as
i
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 aforementioned most of time
celebreties
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celebrities
 dose not having fix salary as
doctors
 they need to
work
 hard for their
welth
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wealth
, as their earnings
depends
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 on how hard they push them selfs to the
work
.
for
example
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 boxer corner
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McGregor
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 routine is merciless and
that is
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 enormous effort they have
over come
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overcome
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 those certain human limitations. in
other hand
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another hand
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 their
work
 is
crutial
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crucial
critical
 until
see
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 the outcome.
secondly
 for the bosses most of
people
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the people
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 who working as
employee
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an employee
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 do not know the how determined of their path to reach to be a boss of
company
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a company
the company
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 and get
big
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a big
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 bunch of
money
 eventually. To
conclution
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conclusion
 comparing
this
 few
group
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groups
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 of people of their income is unwell one side is
peole
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people
 who creating new ideas
for
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to
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make
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making
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money
 ones are
work
 hard for
same
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the same
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. in my opinion
im
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is
 not agree with the statement.
i
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 guess
this
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these
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feelds
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fields
feels
 are not
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talented
 enough to match
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each
 other.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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