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It is believed that people should choose their jobs based on income in order to provide security for their families. Do you agree that salary is an important factor when choosing a job? What are the factors should be considered?

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the pie chart shows the review of 100 customers of the Parkway Hotel by 100 guests in years 2005 and 2010. The service was five times better in 2010. In the
year
 2005, 45% of the customers were satisfied with the service, whereas only 17
percentage
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 of customers were happy in the
year
 2010. The guest results were approximately5 times for good service.
However
 Both the poor and the very poor result was improved in the
year
 2010. It was 36 per cent in 2005 which came down to only 16 %. Overall the customer satisfaction was much higher in the
year
 2010 when compared to 2005.
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