The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.
The charts give
the
information about the employment status and the value changes in the Correct article usage
apply
UK
steel
industry during 1970-2000.
Overall
, the total demand
of
Change preposition
for
steel
in the UK
fell, leading to a significant decrease in the labor
force over the period. Change the spelling
labour
Besides
, the
Correct article usage
apply
UK
steel
production witnessed the same trend as the total UK
demand
, while
the steel
import had an
opposite.
In 1970, the number of workers employed in the Correct article usage
the
steel
industry peaked at 50,000. Over the following years, the figure for employment in the UK
steel
industry declined significantly to around 17,000 in the year 2000.
The year 1970 also
witnessed the total demand
for steel
in the UK
around
200,000 tonnes, Change preposition
at around
while
the figures for production and imports were around 160,000 tonnes and 10,000 tonnes respectively. The three
decades later, both the Correct article usage
Three
demand
and the production of steel
nearly halved, while
the figure for import
Wrong verb form
importing
steel
increased substantially to approximately 70,000.Submitted by thanhhai29102000 on
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