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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - explain what happened - apologise for the accident - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl

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The pie charts compare the proportion of workers in three
sectors
, including manufacturing, sales, and services, in
town
 A and
town
 B in 1960 and 2010. Overall, in
town
 A, service-related
jobs
 became more popular than those in other
sectors
 and made up the biggest
percentage
 in 2010. Meanwhile, in
town
 B, despite the growth of
jobs
 in the service and sales
sectors
, manufacturing
jobs
 still made up the majority of
jobs
 over the given period of time. In
town
 A, 41% of all
jobs
 in 1960 were in manufacturing , while the sales and service
sectors
 made up much lower percentages, of around 30% for each. By 2010 the
percentage
 of service-related
jobs
 had more than doubled, while the
percentage
 of
jobs
 in the two other industries halved). In
town
 B, the
percentage
 of service-related
jobs
also
 rose, but less significant than that of
town
 A, with 10% in 1960 and 25% in 2010. Meanwhile, the figure for manufacturing
jobs
 was still highest, at 53% in 2010, despite a drop of nearly one-
third
. Sales-related
jobs
 saw a slight increase, from 20% in 1960 to 22% in 2010.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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