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The debate on cash versus credit card has been going on for some time. Credit is still a fairly new concept within the history of finance; so many people would rather stick with paper money. According to you, which is a better payment method, cash or credit?

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The changes in payment methods have become more
convinient
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convenient
 after the introduction of cashless payments.As
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Money
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 has become the major part of living. As we spent most of the
money
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 in terms of
cash
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, as we don't get introduced to
credit
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card
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at
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our
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 early life. I would rather
pefer
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prefer
paper
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money
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 over plastic payments will be defined in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,
cash
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 is more comfortable
to
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the
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people who don't have
urban
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 lifestyle. As,
cash
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 is more
feasibe
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feasible
 to finance and
also
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 lack
of
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knowledge
towards
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the usage of
credit
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cards
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, most of them would rather prefer
paper
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money
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 over
credit
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cards
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.
Furthermore
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Paper
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money
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 is accepted almost all over the world. To cite an example of my personal
expirience
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experience
, when I was in
my
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first
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 year of my university, I used to carry
credit
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 or debit
cards
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 along with me
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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 to
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pay
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ay
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pay
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 my bills and other expenses, due to which I used to run out of
cash
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 at month
ending
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. I have discussed the same problem with my parents they suggested
me
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I
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to
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withdraw
cash
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 and asked
to
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me to
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 save some
money
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.
This
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 idea helped me to save the
cash
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 at the time of
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.
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Where as
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 plastic
money
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, especially
credit
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cards
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 has
lot
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a lot
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 many problems related to timely
repaymet
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repayment
repayments
 and annoying calls from
banking
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the banking
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 sector people.
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Also
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 older generation
peolpe
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people
 and children could not be able to know the
usgae
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usage
use
 and payment through these
cards
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.
However
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,
on
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one
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thing
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the thing
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 which cashless payments
is
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 to be appreciated is they reduce
usage
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the usage
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 of
paper
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 and always keep the
money
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 pocket lighter
instead
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 of carrying much
cash
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 a single
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cards
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 does its business. To conclude, owing to the
advantagesin
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advantages in
advantages
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prespective
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perspective
,
such
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 as helping in saving
money
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 and wide acceptance, I obviously believe that
use
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the use
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 of
paper
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money
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 is superior.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • security benefits
  • fraud and theft protection
  • credit score
  • financial products
  • rewards programs
  • cashback
  • budgeting
  • tracking expenses
  • overspend
  • debt accumulation
  • interest payments
  • universal acceptance
  • privacy
  • financial benefits
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