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You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, duration and subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions at the college, asking them to clarify these points for you. In this email, Say what your interest is Explain why the website is unclear Request the information that you need

#college #course #cost #duration #subjects #website #email #person #admissions #points #interest #request #information
Dear Sir or Madam I am
writting
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writing
this
 letter to enquire about the new
courses
 being offered that are mentioned on the college website. I have
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deep
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interest
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interset
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interest
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 in designing, and I have been studying related to Autocad software
since
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last
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the last
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 3 years from online
courses
 for various design aspects. Now, I want to take my learnings to
advance
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 level so that I can opt
my
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 interest as my carrier. While browsing the college's website I could see
notification
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 clearly about the admissions which are open from
last
 week, but I could not open the
courses
 detail tab.
This
 may be due to some technical issue with the website.
Beacuse
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Because
 of
this
 issue, I could not receive any information regarding the
courses
 being offered, their fee structures, and
time
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 period of each one of them.
Therefore
, I request you to kindly provide the
above mentioned
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 details pertaining to subject details, fee and duration, so that I can apply on time as I do not want to miss the opportunity to get enrolled in a reputed college like that of yours. Thank you in advance for your help, I am
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 the information requested with interest. Best Regards, Yadveer Singh
Submitted by Pooja Dhindsa on

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