The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there are many discussions about

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and

women

equally

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valued. In

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it is not achieved

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status of gender

equality

. Simultaneously, it is

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conviction among nations that individuals need to have equal positions in daily life. Personally, I defend the idea that

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gender

equality

can not be possible in

society

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of all, the main reason why I agree with the given statement is that

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equal rights between the sexes can cause many problems in

society

. What I mean is that gender

equality

can not be ,because

women

, biologically, have less physical strength compared to

men

, and more importantly,

women

bear children, which is a huge deal. Girls can not do all things like

men

. We can never have total

equality

between genders, and you shouldn’t

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because

men

and

women

are really different. If you want to pretend that

men

and

women

are

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exactly the same, you will end up with a neutered, sexless

society

and

eventually

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we won’t have any children

any more

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For

instance

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we can see it from developed countries

such

as Germany, Italy ,Russi,etc.

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of birth children are decreasing according to statistics. It is the effect of feminism.

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the

women

`s movement will make

men

get like

women

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versa. Which is a huge problem nowadays like LGBT communities.

Society

and civilization itself

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built on that basic premise. We destroy it, we may end up destroying human civilization itself.

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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that teenage years are the happiest years wheareas other think that the adult life is brings more happiness, inspite of great responsibilities. Give your views and opinions.

These days, school should focus more on producing young people who have the skills required to join the workforce, rather than focusing on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

More and more people enjoy their free time activities which are dangerous (such as mountain-climbing, bungee jumping) What is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.