In school or universities, girls prefer subjects related to art and boys prefer subjects related science. Should this tendency be changed? What is your opinion?

There is a dominant trend in society that has led the younger generation to opt
different
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subject
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subjects
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. It is perceived that girls
wants
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to take subjects related to arts and boys prefer
science related
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science-related
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subjects.
This
essay will examine
this
issue and will present
logical
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conclusion.
To begin
with, many people
beleives
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believes
that girls should
work
in the art
sector
and
male
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males
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should
work
in inventing
sector
.
On the contrary
, there are more boys in the
field
of
homescience
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home science
,
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or doing courses in hotel management in which they are taught how to deal with customers and how to
work
in
kitchen
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a kitchen
the kitchen
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where they can create new
receipes
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recipes
. There
many
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famous chefs in the
field
,
such
as Gordon Ramsey,
Sanjev
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Sanjeev
Kapoor, which has made
this
sector
more male
dominanted
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dominated
. They have broken the trend that males only belong to
the
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science related
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science-related
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work
.
Moreover
, their female counterparts have been working in the
techonology
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technology
sector
where they have earned various awards like Nobel prize,
Field
Medals etc.
For example
, Jennifer Doudna
who
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won the Nobel Prize in the year
of
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2020 for their
work
in chemistry. Even though
,
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the proportion of ladies in
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the field
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field
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fields
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of
phiysics
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physics
and chemistry is less, but
this
is just
begining
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beginning
and more & more are taking
interests
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interest
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in it. The tendency of having education and interests divided based on sex needs to be eradicated
absoultly
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absolutely
. In
conclusion
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I would like to say that there are many boys and girls who are breaking
this
trend and have initiated to take part in various subjects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender stereotypes
  • educational choices
  • irrespective
  • gender barriers
  • diverse educational background
  • traditionally dominated fields
  • promoting gender equality
  • encouraging individual interests
  • breaking down barriers
  • altering perceptions
  • interdisciplinary approach
  • cultivating an inclusive environment
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