The diagrams below show life cycle of the silk and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summerise the information by selecting and reportinh the main features

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The given diagrams illustrate the period of the

silkworm

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silkworm's

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life

also

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there are some steps which involve in producing

silk

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cloth

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,there are 4 stages which build cycles from

eggs

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the eggs

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period to

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cocoon

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the cocoon

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cycle,

as well as

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it can be seen that the process of preparing

silk

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cloth from boiling to weaving First of all,eggs are produced by moths.after ten days,they convert to silkworm

larva

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larvae

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and

they

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apply

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are fed by mulberry

leaf

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leaves

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. 4_6 weeks take long to appear

silk

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thread by the larva.

finally

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,after a period of about 3_8 days, the

cocoon

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was created by

larva

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the larva

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.16 days after producing

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cocoon

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a cocoon

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,it again turns

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into

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moth

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a moth

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and a new cycle will be started.

Regarding

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apply

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production of

silk

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cloth,

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apply

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starts with

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apply

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boiling the

cocoon

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the

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apply

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water.after which,

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the thread

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thread

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threads

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are separated in unwind stage and their length is getting wider between 300_900

m.thread

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thread

can be twisted,

dyed

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and dyed

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finally

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,it is weaved and now it is totally ready.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words silk, cocoon with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

151 words

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