Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender.

In a contemporary era,
both
men and women have equality in every
area
. They
both
are capable to do all works. It is often argued by a section of society that because of different behaviours it is important to set specific jobs for
both
genders.
However
, I firmly disagree with
this
notion. Apparently,
to begin
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with in
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these days there are many resources available that
provides
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help to everyone to get perfection in a certain
area
.
For example
, with the awareness, all the
humans
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beings are well educated and they have skills to do everything. There is nothing impossible for any gender. If they are struggling with anything
then
they can get training
through
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online or in
insituties
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institutions
institutes
.
Therefore
, it is not a good option to make specific work for males and females.
Moreover
, in a modernized time, everyone knows about their interests and they chose a particular
area
according to that. To
examplify
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exemplify
, most of the women provide service in
industrial
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area
which they pick with their
satisfication
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satisfaction
.
As a result
, no one has
right
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to do discriminate
with
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both
of them in terms of
working
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field.
Furthermore
,
such
type
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of partition
is
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also
affects the prosperity of
particular
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the particular
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nation.
For instance
, if all are considered equal
then
country
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the country
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will develop with the contribution of all people. But with the
differentiation
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it has to wait for
related
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the related
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person
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to perform tasks.
Consequently
, there will be
delay
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in the work. To recapitulate, there should be equal opportunities for boys and girls in
profession
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. So that they can work in an independent sector without any restriction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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