Science tells us that some activities are good for our health, while some others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people all over the world continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think this is the case and what might be done to change this?

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are good for a sound life.
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how we could be stay sound and fixed.
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and with a view to the
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come up with major change about
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by the proper guidelines of science-based
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. reasonably,after getting modern
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regarding of
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people
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must accept scientific
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • peer pressure
  • social norms
  • mental health issues
  • binge eating
  • lack of access
  • long-term consequences
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • public health campaigns
  • government regulations
  • taxes
  • dissuade
  • mental health care
  • supportive environment
  • community programs
  • wellness workshops
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