Science tells us that some activities are good for our health, while some others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people all over the world continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think this is the case and what might be done to change this?

It is the age of globalization.
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of knowledge provides
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various patterns of lifestyles to keep healthy,A number of
people
acknowledged scientific
activities
are good for a sound life.
However
, others believe
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not good for
health
.I firmly believed that modern
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exercise
is very much vital for sound
health
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will examine the reason for
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and provide possible solutions To commence with,There are many reasons behind
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many countries especially in developing countries.so they are still far away from accepting the essence of scientific
activities
.
secondly
,Due to lack of modern knowledge-based
education
which is very essential to know about real
activities
of
health
.
As a result
, they are far behind in the consciousness of
health
and modern lifestyle
that is
why they are unable to welcome scientific directions regarding
health
.
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first
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health
how we could be stay sound and fixed.
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health
services by
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health
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majority of
people
are enjoying
health
facilities.
Moreover
,The major solution could be ensuring knowledge-based
education
which is more relevant focusing
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and with a view to the
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awareness
of public healths. To conclude,In my opinion providing technology-based
education
come up with major change about
health
.
people
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their
health
by the proper guidelines of science-based
activities
. reasonably,after getting modern
education
regarding of
health
people
must accept scientific
activities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • peer pressure
  • social norms
  • mental health issues
  • binge eating
  • lack of access
  • long-term consequences
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • public health campaigns
  • government regulations
  • taxes
  • dissuade
  • mental health care
  • supportive environment
  • community programs
  • wellness workshops
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