The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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equality
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is a right that both
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male
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and
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can enjoy the same position in policy, economy, and society. The past 50 years have seen changes
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women
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’s position in many societies.
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,
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still has not been achieved completely. I
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believe
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and my reasons are twofold. In previous centuries,
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were not allowed to have their
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in the patriarchal society until an awareness of feminism appeared came out.
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, most
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still worry about quitting or losing their jobs when they are married and pregnant.  Undoubtedly, companies
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kind of uncertainty, so they will prefer to hire men than
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, especially in a high position.
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is the reason why
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can work in a good company but they always have obstacles in front of their promotion.
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can have their own
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and be commercial independent. In the mid-20th century, the movement of the
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wave feminism,
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argue that they should be allowed the same rights, power and opportunities as men. So far, there are many companies
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provide almost the same career opportunities for
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. Even though there is a complete system for maternity leave,
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absolutely take their child and family as the
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priority.
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,
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are always responsible for housekeeping and play a vital role in raising children. If
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is achieved, husband and wife should share their housework and spend quality time with their children in a
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. The truth is that even though
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are in a double-income family, wives always take more housework than husbands. Overall, without a doubt,
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can almost enjoy the same rights as men now.
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, humans still need to work hard to implement complete
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equality
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • historical context
  • gender pay gap
  • underrepresentation
  • leadership roles
  • gender-based violence
  • educational opportunities
  • workforce
  • legal reforms
  • statistics
  • case studies
  • global perspective
  • progressive changes
  • cultural differences
  • empowerment
  • patriarchy
  • systemic discrimination
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