The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the
percentage
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of
students
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in an England university and their ability to communicate in different languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
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, the
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of
students
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who only spoke English has been reduced over the years and Spanish has been a commonly spoken
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. In the year 2000, the majority of the
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were able to communicate in Spanish holding 30 % and the
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20% of
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who did not have a
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language
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. French only and another
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accounted for 15%
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German only
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speakers
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and two other
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speakers
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captured 10%. In 2010, the greater proportion being Spanish
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accounted for 35% with a notable slight rise
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the year 2000,
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, another
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and two other
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speakers
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an increase in their
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from 15% to 20% and 10% to 15% respectively.
Students
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who spoke no other
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proportion dropped by half to 10% and
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speakers
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with a slight decrease to 10%,
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the
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of
German only
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speakers
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remained the same.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, language, speakers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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