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You have lost something on a bus and called the customer service to get help. You weren't happy with their response. Write a letter to the bus company manager. In your letter, you should: describe the item you lost explain why you weren't happy with the customer service say what action you would like the company to take.

#bus #customer #service #weren #company #manager #item #action
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am unhappy
on
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 your customer service.I have called many times but no
ones
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one
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has answer
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answer
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,I leave a message but no reply
recieved
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received
 until
this
 moment. Let me explain what happened.I was on my vacation
last
 week
i
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I
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 booked a travel schedule on one of
youre
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your
you're
 bus.My luggage
are
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is
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 2 travel bags and a blue
napsack
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knapsack
 with locked and a nametag on the zipper handle.As
i
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I
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 checked out on
youre
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your
 luggage counter as
i
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I
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 arrived
on
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at
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bus
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the bus
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 station,my other travel bag was lost its black bag with a nametag on the side pocket.One of your crew approach me that they will track my missing bag,he
also
 explain to me that probably my luggage was on the other bus.He handed me
phone
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the phone
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 number of your customer service to
follow-up
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follow up
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 status of my
lost
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. Would you kindly reply
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to
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 my email
how
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about how
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 to reach you or your availability so that
i
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 can reach you Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Evan
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